My writing

My writing

Hey guys, today I am going to share with you some not so great writing and some great writing. I am also going to be telling you what I did wrong or what I did well.

Here is my progress:

 Great writing:

Dear heart earring

I have read your letter and I get it I was not being responsible but wasnt me who fell out of my ear was it, and yes I was having fun but when I went home i was devastated. I went to pioneer the other day and I couldn't find you. I know you are sad but there is no such thing as step twins. He did leave you a week ago and you were not even here 1 year, 4 months 14 weeks, 16 days 94 hours and 24 seconds ago  just saying . You have to stay in that box because other wise i will lose you and i don’t want that to happen. I have to keep those purple things in my ears because otherwise my ears will close up and  they do suit me thankyou.Yes you did suit me but you still do. I will tell purple earring to stop being mean.

From your lovely friend Emily          

I think I used so descriptive words and great punctuation in this writing.

No so great writing:

Cinquain

Winter

freezing,cold

slipping, hailing, skiing

snow falling

inside day's

I can make this writing better by using more wow words.

If you want I would love you to comment so feedback to make my posts and writing better.