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Friday, November 25, 2016

edited work

    Edited work


We are learning to edit our work
 anything in light blue has been improved.

3 comments:

  1. Kia ora Emily. I still remember that day. It was fun as well. I love how you have went back and put some existing words in there. Kai pai.

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  2. Kia ora Emily!
    It looks like you had A LOT of fun on that girls day out!!!
    Just to let you know, you made some mistakes while writing that so you might want to go and fix them out but everything else... AWESOME!!!!
    I like how you didn't just use things like , . and you used more!!!!
    I also like how you wrote on top of every slide, "paragraph 1" and so on!
    Keep up the GREAT & AWESOME WORK EMILY!!!

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  3. Hi it's me Elham.
    I really like the story and Wow I love how you used pragraph 1,2,3.
    Maybe next time don't wrote it in capital.
    Is the story true or not true?

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